I like your vivid writing style. Why the food references? Are you a would be chef? Anyway it's a great fun idea and perhaps Mr Depp would have liked it too. Try writing a real screenplay, I think you'd be good. A tip: Horror stories pay well although I've never tried one. Good luck you have talent. JV
RE: "The Invisible Man, starring Johnny Depp" (part 1) - my first comedy mash-up book. Would love feedback.