I really enjoyed the choice of perspective you have here, bringing the focus to Nox, the shift in their relationship from the first half is very hard hitting.
This feels like a greater metaphor/lesson in how people view and treat others. How Sedra proceeds to treat Nox in your second half, its hard not to feel for him, or want to support him. In this situation, supporting the oppressed seems natural, and to begin with, the story feels like it contains a lesson in not oppressing others, and that when you force something to your will, you can't really call it friend - rather like a hostage will say anything to stay alive.
But this is far more thought provoking than that. Nox doesn't just pander, it feels like he was actively pretending to be her friend. The way the psi-meleon are holding the entire of a species responsible for the actions of it's worse members, Nox's indifference feels more callous than indifferet, throwing her off him without caring at all if she gets hurt when doing so had a chance of causing that, yet equally saying he doesn't wish to cause her harm. It feels like the implication could be that they are the same, Sedra didn't wish to cause him harm, she had a goal, and went about meeting it without noticing the results. There is a lot in here about that which goes unnoticed.
But I will show you that reptiles are not humans.
This line really got me, most things go for this approach in the 'better than humanity' but taking it down a slightly bumper yet far more interesting road road. I felt a degree of conflict as the reader, I had wanted to 'support' Nox, but then how he acts makes it harder. I am a strong believer in one mans terrorist is another mans freedom fighter, and this is a whole other level
Correct your intrinsic flaw, or you will perish
Nox makes it sound like he is giving her, and humanity, a chance to live in peace on the planet still, but he believes their flaws intrinsic, which suggests he doesn't believe they can change, and the uprising is already happening planet over.
There is an undercurrent that really caught me on how people don't always understand refugees/immigrants, a species had sought refuge on this planet, and found it. They had brought their ways with them, and not even realized what that was like for the planets natives, instead feeling like they have fully integrated, too blinded by other things to notice. The natives however see refugees coming literally, from a very different world, and the refugees continue to act like they had, bringing with them their custom of domestication. Sedra's shock at finding out the psi-meleon feel this way, it feels like their first attempt to communicate this to humanity. Two species with far more in common than either see. I can't help but wonder how different this world would have been had the native species communicated all this to the refuges when they had first found refuge on the planet, instead of tolerating, ignoring and indulging them until the psi-meleon reached a breaking point. It feels like a hint about communication and mutual respect. This story has so much on so many levels, the surface of Nox rising up is so impressive alone, and all in so few words.
This is very well done, and although minorly uncomfortable to read just in that it's hard to emphasize with one side over the other, enjoyably thought provoking for the very same reason. In our current times, where people are seen as 'intrinsically flawed' due to the country they were born on, and refugees are saved from drowning only to find there is no where for them to go and people are indifferent to their suffering, a story where humanity as whole take that role, might well be the food for thought that hits to spot.
(Also like massive bonus points for how Nox becomes the He from Sedras perspective in those closing sentences of the first half - just all in very well done)
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