To initiate a series "IELTS with me", I would like to share my very first writing for IELTS part 2. It took me so long to familiarize myself with IELTS writing style which I have never known before.
My task is not only to write about a random topic, but also to use the following assigned phrases:
1. To acquire/obtain (knowledge/experience/skill)
2. To master vital soft skills
3. To enhance my resume
4. To put knowledge gained into practice
5. To build/to cement a strong relationship with somebody
Let's have a look and please leave a comment and show me what more I need to improve. ^^
Question: Having a good university degree guarantees people a good job.
To what extent do you agree?
Answer:
It is believed that completing a university education with a good degree is definitely a skeleton key to open better career opportunities. However, the said statement appears to be contentious and from my point of view, being a distinction graduate can be a good start but does not make having a good job become a sure thing. Therefore, this essay will discuss how necessary a university degree is and what more it takes to secure an excellent job.
To begin with, a university degree is what showing your learning outcomes and certifying that you have acquired a certain amount of knowledge by spending 3-5 years to study in high-level education. And when it comes to a competition to get a job, having great achievements in the university will make you stand out from those who do not have any certificate proving their ability. Not to mention that most companies consider having a bachelor’s degree is a precondition to be eligible to apply for a job. Additionally, for some huge earning professions such as lawyers or doctors, a university degree is also a must.
However, as there are numerous graduates with many of them have excellent achievements, it’s worth considering what will make the difference in competition and what helps to enhance your resume other than a good degree. As a matter of fact, among all the candidates having the same background of education, employers are normally impressed by experienced ones who show how they put the knowledge gained in university into practice in relevant fields. Furthermore, mastery of vital soft skills matters as well. Equipping yourself with important skills such as teamwork, time management, problem-solving, etc. absolutely helps to put you ahead of the game.
In conclusion, having a good bachelor’s degree is necessary but if you think it is sufficient to secure a good placement, then you may be the one who fails in landing a dream job.
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Result: 4/5 phrases are used.
I have read this model answer for reference and actually learnt some word choices from it. Link: https://www.testbig.com/ielts-writing-task-ii-ielts-general-training-essays/having-good-university-degree-guarantees-people