Hi @dele02. Thank you for joining us in The Ink Well, and good luck with your writing journey.
Here's some constructive feedback to help you. With a short story, even a very short one, we look for a story arc and resolution. Every good story has a conflict that is resolved in the end.
I encourage you to make use of our catalog of fiction writing tips. You will find guidance on how to build characters, integrate action and dialog, write story plots and add a story arc. Without a story arc, stories do not seem complete. So that is one of the most important skills to learn. Good luck and keep writing!
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