This is so good! I love the twists and turns the story has taken. Great job taking the suggestions of @dante31 and spinning them into a very compelling story.
Are there other suggestions yet for Chapter 3? (I don't see them!) If not, I suggest you write a new post with a title something like "Steemit contest: Help write the story - suggest chapter 3" or something like that. Then, restate the challenge and the rewards, with links to Chapter 1 and Chapter 2.
Meanwhile, I'm thinking!
RE: The story in series: Chapter Two