There was good flow here, I could easily picture them talking. I like how you put traces of tension in the scene, building up towards the end! And poor Liz, she’s not in safe company especially with that last line. Very eerie.
Real quick, just as host of the contest, I want to say that for this week it’s okay what you did with the prompt. It’s creative! But it’s supposed to be a continue the story contest, as you know. In the future the prompt really needs to go at the beginning, and then you tell what happens next to have a valid entry. I guess I didn’t explicitly put that in the rules. I’ll update that next week, but for this one you’re all set.
RE: We-Write #11: Home Alone